I'm thinking of writing a short story. what do u guys think of it? be honest!?

Both stories sound pretty interesting. I don't know if they are my cup of tea, but for their genre(which I don't know what theirs are...) they sound pretty good. Filled with thrill. Make sure, before you fully write you stories, research all that you can on the Islam religion and culture so that your story seems genuine and not "a muslim guy goes to america". Does that make sense? Also, research on FBI conversations. I know you're a guy, but Miss Congeniality. If you've never heard of it (totally understandable, but I'm using it for lack of a better example), think of the conversations in that movie. The characters in the FBI are very respectful, always replying with "Sir, ..." and they are very firm and stern. Make sure your FBI character, although secondary, seem credible in your story. Remember to use strong verbs and descriptive words (adj. and adv.) in your story to keep the reader interested and your thriller novel animated!